An English poem by Thinkinh

[Thinkinh]

Tại một câu viết bậy trên bàn
I know you lie when you hide, the truth
Don't let the time change your mind, inside
Look up the sky, see the guiding stars
Then you can try to realize your mind.
(24 March 07 ,tietcdduocnghicodikhamsklandocdautien)
Is that stupid? :D

[dragoon]

Each sentence sounds good
But when read all 4 sentences, each doesnt fit others ^^

[greyfox]

I'm with Dragoon too, they dont quite fit each other. Anyway thanks for your sharing Thinkinh, you are welcome :)

[zokzok_online_k]

I have a poem
--------No love if you don't love
----Love come you if you win yourself

[Mr Lee]

What did you call it?A poem????It looks like a six-eight words poem (what is the name is this poem kind???I don't know how to call it ^^).Nothing sounds something.How about this :
The sun for the days
The moon for the nights
The rose for the love
and I'm here for you...forever!!!
Maybe it does not sound as a poem but if it so:
Mặt trời xin để ánh mai
Và vầng trăng sáng đêm dài tối tăm
Hồng ơi nở thắm tình mình
Để anh trọn kiếp chung tình với em
>>>>>maybe it is not so good but it is my only bilingual poem:nosey:

[thuthuydang90]

@Mr Lee : I love ur poem, sound great ! where did u get it ? or a yourself one ? ^_^

[Mr Lee]

Which part do you love?Vietnamese or English???I have the idea for the E one when I saw some sentences(somewhere I don't remember).After have an E poem,I began to translate it into V.Now that what I have ^^.I'm wondering it is my E poem or not,but the V part is mine.
I'm very happy when you like it ^^

[dragoon]

Yeah, I like the V poem, too
I cant imagine these simple E sentences could become a great V poem ^^

[Mr Lee]

Oh I feel so ashamed:wooi2:.I must say thanks so much:congratz:
You have a small mistake : "simple" not "spimle" :D
Oh! I relized that you have fixed it.That's good!It means that is not your grammar mistake.

[dragoon]

:)) I fixed it while you were posting this comment :))

[zokzok_online_k]

I look everyone very glad , next visit topic , I going to write the love poem by English . All wait to me , please . See you again soon .

[greyfox]

hehe first mistake of MrLee. U shouln't use "ashamed" here, sorry but i don't know how to express this in E, but in V this word means "nhục nhã", in this case I think "embarrased" might be ok, consider it ;)

[greyfox]

Every one should learn from Zok, for his/her enthusiasm, though his/her English skill is not quite good :)

@Zokzok: u cannot say "I look everyone very glad", it should be " I can see everyone's very glad"

"next visit topic" should be "next visit (to this topic) "
"I going to write" should be "I'm going to write"
" In Eng" not "by Eng"
"wait for" not "wait to"

Anyway, thank you for your enthusiasm ^^

[Mr Lee]

I don't think so,fox."feel ashamed" means "cảm thấy xấu hổ",not "nhục nhã" as you said.Maybe it has that meaning when it stands alone but it doesn't correct in this case.Thanks for you review anyway ^^

[greyfox]

I don't thik this one is a poem, but really funny,and meaningful also^^ This used to be my signature:

Friends are like the underwears, always near u
Good friends are like the condoms, always protect u
Best friends are like the viagra, lift u up when u r down

Just wanna share, perhaps someone has seen it. Have fun ^^

[Mr Lee]

If you post one poem like this again,I'll del it.Funny but it should not be posted here.ok?